Taiwan’s Baseball needs improvement
In the past, baseball was more popular in Taiwan than nowadays. There were six teams in CPBL. People were eager to go to court and watch the game. Every match could affect audience a lot. After games, newspaper would report it and consider it as important issue. People cared baseball and liked baseball. They enjoyed it, and even felt proud of it. Chinese Taipei Team often did well in international baseball games. Taiwanese watched games and celebrated our victories. Those times were all good memories.
However, during recent three years, the situation has changed. Our team turns to lose more matches. We are losing our advantage among Asia. It is not good news to hear about. Yet it is true. We could compete with the best teams before. But now we have difficulty in facing teams which were considered inferior to ours.
At the same time, Japan and Korea are still making great progress. Taking the two countries for example, we can find that their government devoted to support their teams. There are still many good baseball players in Taiwan, but what we need is more support from government. We need discipline, investment, and outstanding couches to make our team a better and more powerful team. If we can fulfill those expectations, then we could succeed. We can enjoy the graceful victory again!
Reviewer’s opinions.
回覆刪除1. It would be more interesting and attractive to mention why Taiwan's baseball become weak.
2. Take examples like which match we win big and the impossible match we lose.
3. Personally I think the ball game fans' participation is also critical to the teams
Editor’s opinions.
回覆刪除1. You may mention the full name for ‘CPBL’ so readers would be more clear.
2. Write a representative game we have won in the history in the beginning to attract readers’ sights and to recall their old memories. And tell why our team was so good before.
3. Make comparison of the policies before and now and conclude the possible answer for why it becomes bad now.
4. You may write ‘Taiwan’s baseball was great!’ as title to attract readers’ attention and encourage them.
Here is the conversation.
回覆刪除[1:07] Alina Roxley: alice is writer now
[1:08] Brooke Yven: Cause we are not the writer of her news, how can we tell what is about her news?
[1:08] alicealice Zepp: I am the writer
[1:08] Alina Roxley: so she's the writer
[1:08] Alina Roxley: and tells the news
[1:08] Alina Roxley: lol
[1:09] Brooke Yven: Do you mean that everyone would play four roles each time?
[1:09] Alina Roxley: yes
[1:09] Heather Alenquer: and i am the reviwer
[1:09] Brooke Yven: I finally see...
[1:09] Alina Roxley: lol
[1:09] Alina Roxley: so im the editor
[1:09] alicealice Zepp: http://classalice.blogspot.com
[1:09] Alina Roxley: brooke is the organizer this time :)
[1:09] alicealice Zepp: sorry you should add /
[1:09] Brooke Yven: Then I'll be the organizer.
[1:10] alicealice Zepp: But you are the organizer on Lin s news@___@
[1:10] Brooke Yven: but wait a minute
[1:10] Alina Roxley: no brooke was the editor on my news
[1:11] alicealice Zepp: oh I misunderstood
[1:11] alicealice Zepp: sorry : )
[1:11] Alina Roxley: CPSL
[1:11] Alina Roxley: CPBL
[1:11] alicealice Zepp: Sorry!!!!!
[1:11] Alina Roxley: maybe u can write the full names
[1:11] alicealice Zepp: OK
[1:12] Alina Roxley: so readers would be more clears
[1:12] Brooke Yven: Then, everyone shoud list only 1 headlines and leading sentence? Instead of one organizer lists 4 headlines and leading sentences?
[1:12] alicealice Zepp: I see
[1:12] Alina Roxley: some readers like me rn't familiar with baseball
[1:12] alicealice Zepp: Sorry I didn t consider it : ) I will add it
[1:13] Alina Roxley: for example national central university(NCU
[1:13] Alina Roxley: (NCU)
[1:13] alicealice Zepp: OK
[1:13] Alina Roxley: sorry brooke i don;t get u
[1:14] Heather Alenquer: do you think it would be interesting to mention why Taiwan's baseball become weak?
[1:14] alicealice Zepp: Interesting?
[1:15] Alina Roxley: alice, can u tell us what r ur point in each paragraph respectively
[1:15] Heather Alenquer: more attracting i guess
[1:15] alicealice Zepp: OK
[1:15] Heather Alenquer: why it is popular before and why it is weak now
[1:15] Heather Alenquer: like that
[1:16] alicealice Zepp: 1. Baseball was more popular at Taiwan at the past. And we had good team.
[1:17] alicealice Zepp: 2. Yet now the situation has changed. Our Team beome weak.
[1:19] alicealice Zepp: 3.We are lack of support form the government and we need more disciplines and skills and efforts to make our team better.
[1:20] alicealice Zepp: Heather can you say what you said again?
[1:20] Heather Alenquer: ok i think if you write about why then it is more apealing to readers
[1:21] alicealice Zepp: OK I will add those reasons
[1:21] Heather Alenquer: why it is popular before and why it is not now
[1:21] Heather Alenquer: ya
[1:21] Heather Alenquer: :)
[1:21] alicealice Zepp: I see : )
[1:22] Heather Alenquer: and i think maybe you can take examples
[1:22] Alina Roxley: i agree with heather
[1:22] alicealice Zepp: examples?
[1:22] Heather Alenquer: like which match we win big
[1:23] alicealice Zepp: Oh I see
[1:23] Heather Alenquer: and the impossible match we lose
[1:23] alicealice Zepp: OK
[1:23] Alina Roxley: ya u can write a representive game we have winned in the history
[1:24] Alina Roxley: and why our team was so good before
[1:24] Alina Roxley: maybe u can make comparison of the policies before and now
[1:24] Alina Roxley: in the beginning maybe u can write a representative game we have winned to attract the readers
[1:25] alicealice Zepp: OH I see : )
[1:25] Alina Roxley: recall the readers memory
[1:25] alicealice Zepp: Um
[1:25] Heather Alenquer: personally i think the ball game fan s' participation is also critical to the teams
[1:25] Alina Roxley: ya to write about some imprtant effects
[1:26] Alina Roxley: not just statement
[1:26] alicealice Zepp: OK I will revise it
[1:26] Alina Roxley: it may attract readers more
[1:26] Alina Roxley: and rich ur story
[1:27] Heather Alenquer: yes
[1:27] alicealice Zepp: OK thanks ; ))
[1:27] Alina Roxley: Alina Roxley: ya to write about some imprtant effects
[1:27] Alina Roxley: sorry i mean some "facts"
[1:27] alicealice Zepp: oh
[1:28] Alina Roxley: not just say it was good and it is bad
[1:28] Alina Roxley: tell more about what policies make them good and bad
[1:28] Alina Roxley: and what stories support that they r good and ba
[1:28] Alina Roxley: bad
[1:29] alicealice Zepp: Ok, I see your point : )
[1:29] Alina Roxley: :)
[1:29] Heather Alenquer: are we done now?
[1:29] Alina Roxley: and the title
[1:30] Alina Roxley: maybe u can say Taiwan's baseball was great!
[1:30] alicealice Zepp: OH!!!!!
[1:30] alicealice Zepp: XDDDD I see
[1:30] Alina Roxley: maybe it sttracts readers attention more
[1:30] Alina Roxley: lol
[1:30] Alina Roxley: sttract
[1:30] Alina Roxley: attract
[1:31] alicealice Zepp: good advice
[1:31] Alina Roxley: and more encouraging to our people
[1:31] Alina Roxley: the emotion
[1:31] Alina Roxley: the old memory
[1:31] Heather Alenquer: ya i agree
[1:31] alicealice Zepp: Umm
[1:31] alicealice Zepp: OK
[1:32] Alina Roxley: :)